>pros:
- light and shading
-a touch of realism in some places such as abdomen
>cons:
- genitalia and breasts does not look seductive, which defeats the entire purpose. nudity needs to be seductive as well, or else people will get off to holocaust pictures
- her right arm/shoulder
-the shoulder/clavicle/neck area needs work
- the face looks ok, but may need expression
>advice:
-context: in my experience, things are much hotter when there is a context and a theme behind a hentai art. this just seems like a painting
- realism is good, but dont forget that the purpose of hentai is lewdity: the fat folds are realistic but having that many may be excessive for most people
- read more hentai mangas and copy their styles or techniques; read popular ones to see what kind of art form people tend to like: look at asanagi in particular (pic related), he makes hilariously unrealistic hentai, but the context and seductiveness makes him one of the top hentai artists